Here's a few things I saw online today...thought they looked alright.
-Owner's Don't Knock
Not: She read the letter after she opened it.
But: She opened the letter and read it.
Not: He spoke softly and gently.
But: He whispered.
Not: They began to speak
But: They spoke...
Not: "Please don't do it," she cried, and fell sobbing to her knees.
But: Her grip on his arm tightened and her voice grew raspy. "Please don't do it."
But: Her grip on his arm tightened and her voice grew raspy. "Please don't do it."
Not: After lunch, she decided to go for a long walk.
But: After lunch, she went for a long walk.
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